A very promising draft and always interesting. One or two points to tighten. It is not Gilda in Thelma and Louise who shoots the rapist red neck Harlem but Louise, hence Ridley Scott in this film challenges the passive representation of women in this road/thriller movie. Keep the following for Question 2: But you need to correct the mistake. Remember the film Gilda is a classicfilm noir and the main character Gilda is the archetypal femme fatale whose deviance is cured when she domesticated through marriage.
I could strengthen by focusing also on the notion of enigma because it is unclear who the villain is in your production. Also the way you cut between the exterior and interior shots reinforces suspense but also adds a sense of illusion and reality which is a key feature of The Third Man signified by the use of shadows and chiaroscuro lighting. I'm not going back into your power point incase I lose this comment but I assume you referenced the clip in Animal Kingdom where Josh is sitting on the toilet distraught in the knowledge that his girlfriend has been murdered.
You could add to question 5 that your editing increases the appeal whilst the contrast between the snow and the gloom of the bathroom adds to the drama and makes your film more interesting to view. This is a theory about narrative structure and relates (Strauss - theorist)) to the notion of binary opposites adding to the sense of conflict/drama.
You could also focus on the connotations of an econsoed space being a primary generic convention, i.e. Beaumont being tricked into Ordell's car boot in Jackie Brown, and then being shot in the car boot; Noodles shooting the corrupt cop in the lift in Once Upon a Time in America; Jason's victim (after Jason throws acid in his face) being thrown into the back of the van before being abandoned in the Essex Marshes to an unknown fate.
Strong Level 3 at present, with a few more of the revised revisions this has Level 4 potential.
The name Tiffany - you could reference Eve's death in Once Upon a Time in America - she enters the room and switches on a Tiffany lamp and when she dies the corrupt cop turns it off. If this prop in Leone's film inspired the name of your main character then you need to make this reference.
Have posted similar comment on Robin's response to question1.
Also check out the following film website http://www.filmsite.org/filmnoir.html which has splendid comments on film noir for example
"Primary Characteristics and Conventions of Film Noir: Themes and Styles: The primary moods of classic film noir were melancholy, alienation, bleakness, disillusionment, disenchantment, pessimism, ambiguity, moral corruption, evil, guilt, desperation and paranoia...." Identify which of these moods your film communicates.
Locations: Your film is an example of Straus' theory of Narrative where he claims that binary opposites create drama and conflict. (Your title Red Snow also indicates binary opposites or a contradiction). Thus the contrast between the gloomy confined space of the bathroom and the trackless exterior shots indicate the notions of good and evil which are often themes at the heart of the thriller genre, though these lines can be blurred. For example:
It would be useful if you placed a screen shot or clip from the sequence in Animal Kingdom where Josh is in the bathroom sitting on the loo with a shot of your deeply troubled character on the toilet.
Could use the following for question 2:
Character types: The notion of split personality or psychotic behaviour and the ambiguity/enigma surrounding the two males in your film. Think about Normal Bates in Psycho, Louis's impulsive and off the wall killing of Melanie in Jackie Brown....
To continue with character types you also have the binary opposites with the two male characters, on large and inscrutable like the main character in No Country for Old Men contrasting with the troubled young man fighting his demons in the bathroom; his body languages suggests somebody sinking into a foetal position.
Costume: Again binary opposites here, the hoodie thug in contrast with the middle class tortured "intellectual"! The girl's red coat, if you've seen Schindler's List the film is in black and white apart from a little girl whose red coat stands out as the Jews are rounded up. You may be able to get a clip on youtube. This singles the child out and red connotes danger, this colour is also used in the black and white film Sin City.
Narrative structure or editing technique:
Editing: note the following re narrative structure of thrillers from www.filmsite.org
"Storylines in film noir are often elliptical, non-linear and twisting. Narratives were frequently complex, maze-like and convoluted, and typically told with foreboding background music, flashbacks (or a series of flashbacks)....... Amnesia suffered by the protagonist was a common plot device, as was the downfall of an innocent Everyman who fell victim to temptation or was framed.... Here you can reference films like "Memento" or Tarangino's Pulp Fiction and Jackie Brown with convoluted plots ....
Also for Question 2 are you representing social class stereotypes, hoodie as anti social working class thug, in contrast to the middle class angst ridden young man twisted up with guild or inability to face reality.
Re flashback technique, in your film this indicates disorientation and psychosis in your film whilst also you are developing a convention of noir thrillers.
Also the flashback adds to the enigma, another convention of the genre and poses the question who is guilty of the murder. Is the young man in the bathroom hiding his guilt and not facing reality or?????
A very promising draft and always interesting. One or two points to tighten. It is not Gilda in Thelma and Louise who shoots the rapist red neck Harlem but Louise, hence Ridley Scott in this film challenges the passive representation of women in this road/thriller movie. Keep the following for Question 2:
ReplyDeleteBut you need to correct the mistake. Remember the film Gilda is a classicfilm noir and the main character Gilda is the archetypal femme fatale whose deviance is cured when she domesticated through marriage.
I could strengthen by focusing also on the notion of enigma because it is unclear who the villain is in your production. Also the way you cut between the exterior and interior shots reinforces suspense but also adds a sense of illusion and reality which is a key feature of The Third Man signified by the use of shadows and chiaroscuro lighting. I'm not going back into your power point incase I lose this comment but I assume you referenced the clip in Animal Kingdom where Josh is sitting on the toilet distraught in the knowledge that his girlfriend has been murdered.
You could add to question 5 that your editing increases the appeal whilst the contrast between the snow and the gloom of the bathroom adds to the drama and makes your film more interesting to view. This is a theory about narrative structure and relates (Strauss - theorist)) to the notion of binary opposites adding to the sense of conflict/drama.
You could also focus on the connotations of an econsoed space being a primary generic convention, i.e. Beaumont being tricked into Ordell's car boot in Jackie Brown, and then being shot in the car boot; Noodles shooting the corrupt cop in the lift in Once Upon a Time in America; Jason's victim (after Jason throws acid in his face) being thrown into the back of the van before being abandoned in the Essex Marshes to an unknown fate.
Strong Level 3 at present, with a few more of the revised revisions this has Level 4 potential.
The name Tiffany - you could reference Eve's death in Once Upon a Time in America - she enters the room and switches on a Tiffany lamp and when she dies the corrupt cop turns it off. If this prop in Leone's film inspired the name of your main character then you need to make this reference.
ReplyDeleteHave posted similar comment on Robin's response to question1.
ReplyDeleteAlso check out the following film website http://www.filmsite.org/filmnoir.html which has splendid comments on film noir for example
"Primary Characteristics and Conventions of Film Noir: Themes and Styles: The primary moods of classic film noir were melancholy, alienation, bleakness, disillusionment, disenchantment, pessimism, ambiguity, moral corruption, evil, guilt, desperation and paranoia...." Identify which of these moods your film communicates.
Locations: Your film is an example of Straus' theory of Narrative where he claims that binary opposites create drama and conflict. (Your title Red Snow also indicates binary opposites or a contradiction). Thus the contrast between the gloomy confined space of the bathroom and the trackless exterior shots indicate the notions of good and evil which are often themes at the heart of the thriller genre, though these lines can be blurred. For example:
It would be useful if you placed a screen shot or clip from the sequence in Animal Kingdom where Josh is in the bathroom sitting on the loo with a shot of your deeply troubled character on the toilet.
Could use the following for question 2:
Character types: The notion of split personality or psychotic behaviour and the ambiguity/enigma surrounding the two males in your film. Think about Normal Bates in Psycho, Louis's impulsive and off the wall killing of Melanie in Jackie Brown....
To continue with character types you also have the binary opposites with the two male characters, on large and inscrutable like the main character in No Country for Old Men contrasting with the troubled young man fighting his demons in the bathroom; his body languages suggests somebody sinking into a foetal position.
Costume: Again binary opposites here, the hoodie thug in contrast with the middle class tortured "intellectual"! The girl's red coat, if you've seen Schindler's List the film is in black and white apart from a little girl whose red coat stands out as the Jews are rounded up. You may be able to get a clip on youtube. This singles the child out and red connotes danger, this colour is also used in the black and white film Sin City.
Narrative structure or editing technique:
Editing: note the following re narrative structure of thrillers from www.filmsite.org
"Storylines in film noir are often elliptical, non-linear and twisting. Narratives were frequently complex, maze-like and convoluted, and typically told with foreboding background music, flashbacks (or a series of flashbacks)....... Amnesia suffered by the protagonist was a common plot device, as was the downfall of an innocent Everyman who fell victim to temptation or was framed....
Here you can reference films like "Memento" or Tarangino's Pulp Fiction and Jackie Brown with convoluted plots ....
Also for Question 2 are you representing social class stereotypes, hoodie as anti social working class thug, in contrast to the middle class angst ridden young man twisted up with guild or inability to face reality.
Re flashback technique, in your film this indicates disorientation and psychosis in your film whilst also you are developing a convention of noir thrillers.
ReplyDeleteAlso the flashback adds to the enigma, another convention of the genre and poses the question who is guilty of the murder. Is the young man in the bathroom hiding his guilt and not facing reality or?????